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Late one night in a scientists lab, Dr. Smolders snatched the edge of his coat and ripped it off. He knew he should have listened to his driver and left his coat at home- it was as hot as dragons fire in here. Placing his lumpy, hand knitted coat on a slightly charred chair, victim to millions of experiments gone wrong, he turned back to his work- a glowing green chemical ooze labeled h7793. Then it happened...
This is the start of my story, "A Stroke of Brilliance".
Please comment what you think of it, and any improvements that can be made.
